Wednesday, September 29, 2010

draft #1

Guadia J Azize
instructor:Magdalena Bogacka
English 101. 0800
September 16th, 2010


     Who would have thought, that men had  the capacity to generate so much fuzz about their sexual and yet, manly appearance. A concept that has fueled an inclination to incorporate  this new marketing frenzy in sport commercials and consumer- product advertisements in this country alone. I just referred to what Bordo stated in his opening statements on (pg.169). Men have asserted themselves as marketable, sexually appealing , and intelligent artistic beings. as Bordo puts it in "beauty(re)discovers the male body" "fashion has taken the lead." This resonates with the discussion i am going to embark on, as it relates to a specific ad which i picked out to demonstrate what it is that this particular ad illustrates , aside from the obvious(Polo Blue Ralph Lauren men's fragrance). Sometimes you have to read between the lines figuratively speaking to decode the subliminal message being marketed along side the product (cologne) itself. The ad conveys the "leaner" quality of masculinity through the model's swaying posture as he sits, resting his right elbow on his knee; all while a firm and defiant stare finds itself on the model's face. A depiction that is wonderfully marketed to get the consumers' attention ; ultimately offering them a reason to buy the product. I will point out the main characteristics that caught my attention in this ad : the models appearance; the blue shirt, more significantly the hidden meaning of the color (blue); and the background setting where the action takes place.


One of the main features that makes this ad jump out at you the minute you glance at it, without a doubt, i would say is his looks. He looks mild in temper and yet, ready to conquer the world a the thump of a heart beat. If one could peer through his eyes you would see neatly shaped glazing pair of stars mesmerizing the wondering curiosity of any, who dared to engage in a staring competition. And as you keep looking, you realize he is not one bid intimidated.On the contrary, he is absorbing everything in as if to say (is that all you got!). His hair on the other hand displays stylish waves of interweaving subtle texture , while appearing wild and unsettling, as it shakes your composure and then you stop for a moment to catch your breath only to learn you were hit with prevailing winds casted out from his whirled silky hair. The models skin radiates a masculine aura  that contains substance and maturity ; especially through its tanned appearance reflecting color and meaning to the model's vibrant image, loudly coming out of the ad and proclaiming (you can look like me if you buy my product). moreover, his height shows stature and dominance towering over his would-be -competitors, suggesting greater marketing influence over the paying-public. As you will find out, appearance is just one of the driving forces selling masculinity to the consumer, for i will dedicate my next observation on a significant color (blue) symbol which i will correlate with being masculine.


bryan, payton referes to  LOS ANGELES-based shoe designer, GEORGE ESQUIVEL in "make the shoe fit: jeans are casual. but don't be casual about matching your footwear." ( men's health) Oct. 2010: 100. citing, pairing jeans with shoes is all about balance. which buy the way is the source for my ad. The point I'm trying to make is, the color" blue" is  popular and fashionable for both  urban and suburban men alike. Whether you are to wear  a MACY'S navy blue suit  to attend a business matter, or casual blue jeans preserved for an outing with your friends. You can not escape its aesthetic appeal. one in which the men in uniform have chosen to represent their masculinity in a very professional, athletic and artistic way. In times square, you see a substantial amount of men wearing the color blue, all dressed in uniform; and what  organization other than the new york city police department gives you that impression. The unique color has come to signify honesty, orderly, bravery, and most of all, respect; the same characteristics resembling the appearance of the model in my advertisement ad. There is something peculiar about the color that makes a police officer as well as the model in the ad masculine. maybe the color gives the skin underneath the blue shirt , visibility and an inviting gesture to the gazing eyes. Or could it be its hypnotic way of seducing the audience; or the unnerving nature that can be unleashed any time to tame the rebellious heart. What ever the reason , This color has permanently placed its imprint as a symbol representative of masculinity. Suggesting that it is okay for men to be dressed in blue. As a result it has become a fashionable statement, that men has accepted as being part  of their dress-code. even the new york football giants, when kicking a field goal , the sports announcer, emphatically, calls out the words "true blue" insinuating victory ,hope, and winning attitude. These are the connections i make with the model in the blue shirt and being masculine. further more i will discuss the other characteristic that i have not touched on yet. Which is the back ground setting that makes the colors stand out and where the action takes place.


The background setting shown in the ad is a perfect compliment to the color patterns selected to give this illustration life and energy. I like the way the atmosphere, surrounding the ad, blends flawlessly; with the pale-white and fading-blue colors. And how the sea reflects that image as it looks passively obedient; anticipating any change in the weather that would interrupt its tranquility; a description that best fits the model in this ad. Someone who is calm and collective , but eager to show his god-given-talent of his artistic display, attract the intended consumer without having to say a word, which is reflective in his demeanor. The setting tells a story of a man who enjoys the out-door activities, such as walking through the park, cruising on a boat in uncharted waters, having a romantic outing on the roof top of a building. And engaging in breathtaking pursuits of wild animals in unexplored landscapes. The setting also gives the impression of a man who is a risk-taker with an out-going personality and reassured of his  sexuality, a personal attribute vividly displayed in his aesthetic presence.


I foresee a bright future for male-models in the advertisement industry as well as in the entertainment industry. This is a phenomena that has sky-rocketed to unprecedented levels, as i have explained through out my observations on how masculinity is incorporated to sell the product (cologne). Men have been given a formal, aesthetic platform to act out their roles as models for marketing advertisements and as innovative entertainment artists. It is no longer a taboo to use men as provocative characters in male magazines or Hollywood movies as long as the majority of the public demands it. Our culture, in many ways, has adapted to the social changes that is still taking place. Men can be macho  and sensual at the same time. we are living in a culture that is very competitive, therefore, you have to keep up with the new fashion trends being implemented, that is ever changing the way men are perceived by the buying public. Men have become obsessed with the way they look; to land job;to feel desirable;and to appeal to their sexual preferences. All and all, this ambitions keep men on their toes, looking for ideas to give masculinity a marketable edge.

4 comments:

  1. Guadia,
    This is an impressive first draft whose strength lies in the rich and colorful detail and description.

    The introduction is engaging and I command your incorporation of Bordo’s ideas and quotes. But rather than describing what you will be doing in the paper, compose a thesis which illustrates what is the type of masculinity that the ad for Polo cologne is selling along with the product itself.

    The first body paragraph thoroughly analyzes the model’s gaze and face. Your choice of detail and rendition of them is quite lifelike. Well done  But the concluding sentence again reverts to the didactic mode you employed in your introduction “I will dedicate my next observation…”. Think about a more effective transitional sentence.

    The second body paragraph makes a very insightful connection between blue and the color of uniforms worn by authority figures (police) and athletes (Giants). But I would suggest you reconsider connecting the model in the advertisement to New York City as the magazine in which you found the ad isn’t a New York City magazine, is it? Isn’t it an international magazine? Yet the idea of the color blue as synonymous with a uniform is very apt as the Polo shirt is an athletic uniform, right? Also there is more obvious relationship between blue and masculinity isn’t there? Once again, the transitional sentence is quite didactic.

    The third body paragraph in providing an analysis of the ad’s setting constructs a wonderful narrative of a man in the natural element, nature. You mention the model’s ‘god-given-talent’ but what is this talent? Think about what type of masculinity the observations you make about the setting- male tracking game, “risk-taker”- support?

    Finally, your conclusion makes a valid point; the male body is subject to the whims of the consumers/viewers who are never quite satisfied. But I’m not certain how this reflects what you analyze in your ad? The model in your ad is not flashing skin. Think about the thesis you were asked to compose. If you have a thesis in your introduction, it will be much easier to make a prediction of how that particular masculine trend presented in the Polo ad, will influence the future of men and how they are portrayed in advertisements and media.

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  2. I think that your essay does address the sexuality you are talking about. I think you give many valid points in your essay and give many life examples in your introduction.

    I think your thesis is very well supported throughtout your paper and I think the ad you chose greatly compliments your point.

    You do discuss the ad alot and all of its hidden messages which means you are on task.

    I think the ideas your discussing in each paragraph are very well done especially in body paragraphs one and two.

    I think your conclusion is well written and you do make a valid point our conclusions are very similar i think.

    i believe you have many strenghts but you just need to fix a few things like making the capital letters at the end of sentences and etc.

    But over all i think your essay goes into great detail and it shows you know what your talking about.

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  3. at the beginning of my sentence i ment masculinity lol

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  4. Your essay is well composed and the task is well addressed.

    Your thesis fits well and makes the paper flow throughout the rest of the paragraphs

    Yes you analyze the advertizement and give us a well mental picture (i can picture the ad as a I read the essay)

    yes is body paragraphs support the thesis of a mans features his appereance. Especially paragraph 1 "mild in temper" and paragraph 3 the setting the fading blue colors. The other paragraph could have used a bit more relativeness to the thesis.

    Very solid endning restae his introduction and mention the colongue and the obbsesion of men and their appearance.

    The strength of the essay, the intro caught my attention and the rest just flowed.

    (We spoke of it on monday his introduction was needed of some changes. I see the changes and his lack of capitalization but now its looking really good. Strong essay.

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